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Post by Nanocrystal on Jan 1, 2024 2:38:46 GMT
wunty Just finished reading Interloper. Really enjoyed it, congratulations on finishing it. You have a gift for horror, and a very vivid writing style. Big Silent Hill and Jacob's Ladder vibes, and I recognised Stephen King in some of the little writing tricks you used (implemented very well). The ending was a gut punch that I knew was coming but it still hit hard. The interleaving of the build up to the finale with the children's story to give the other perspective worked really well. The whole novel drips with a grimy feeling, and ominous threats in all the mundane details. The ambiguity you left with Yana and what she was doing with her children (?) was great/horrific. Can tell it was a first draft but the whole thing tied together impressively well by the end. You should definitely go back and edit it, the concept, structure and story are strong and you could develop it into something worth trying to publish I reckon.
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Post by sunjumper on Jan 4, 2024 9:18:53 GMT
I'm glad I'm not the only one who saw the parallels between the story and Silent Hill and Jacob's Ladder. (It's also good to see that you are still among us Nano.) wunty Now you have two sets of feedback that confirm that you are sitting on a really strong story here. I hope you return to it in the future.
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Post by wunty on Jan 9, 2024 10:04:44 GMT
sunjumper & NanocrystalThank you both. Means a lot that you both think there is some worth in this and your feedback is very kind. I'll be starting the edit on this this week. sunjumper I will now also be catching up on your story and apologies for not being able to before now. Family commitments over xmas meant I wasn't anywhere near a screen and as such I've fallen a bit behind with your writing.
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Post by sunjumper on Jan 11, 2024 19:01:17 GMT
wuntyYeah, no worries. I was suspecting that you were caught in the dimension beyond space and time that is the time between Christmas and new year. I'm still writing, but much slower than I had hoped. Work mostly insists of being shit leaving me utterly drained more often than not. But I am following my own advice that a couple of words are infinitely better than none. I hope that I get enough for a decent update done this week. We'll see.
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Post by sunjumper on Jan 15, 2024 2:27:55 GMT
A bit on the late side but I did manage to get the beginning of chapter 6 done. I'm a bit proud of myself because this is already deep in the territory where I would have lost the energy to keep going in the past. I am enjoying the story. And there are just enough regular readers to keep me going.
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Post by sunjumper on Jan 16, 2024 16:17:15 GMT
And chapter 6 continues. Cara is still in a bad spot and potential trouble is ahead.
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Post by sunjumper on Jan 29, 2024 2:26:05 GMT
And another part of chapter 6 is done. The pirate adventure continues and things go, of course, very wrong. By the way, is there anyone still here?
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Post by sunjumper on Feb 4, 2024 18:40:58 GMT
It feels a little weird to post here all on my own... Nevertheless here is the weekly update: chapter 6 is nearing its end, this is the biggest fight scene so far and the chapter will then continue and end with a 'boss battle'.
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Post by wunty on Feb 5, 2024 9:33:12 GMT
This took forever, mostly because I was to stubborn to post a new update without the stupid pirates finally attacking. Nonetheless chapter 5 is finally done. This is also my largest update yet. From now on I hope to be a bit more chill and post smaller updates more often. Enjoy the new part and merry Christmas everyone. You have been alone in here. That's shit. The last six weeks or so have been, to put it quite simply, a fucking mess personally. I have this part open on my mac at work today and will read it throughout the day. I WILL catch up, and bloody well done for sticking with it.
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Post by sunjumper on Feb 5, 2024 9:41:50 GMT
This took forever, mostly because I was to stubborn to post a new update without the stupid pirates finally attacking. Nonetheless chapter 5 is finally done. This is also my largest update yet. From now on I hope to be a bit more chill and post smaller updates more often. Enjoy the new part and merry Christmas everyone. You have been alone in here. That's shit. The last six weeks or so have been, to put it quite simply, a fucking mess personally. I have this part open on my mac at work today and will read it throughout the day. I WILL catch up, and bloody well done for sticking with it. You're alive! Glad to see you return. I'm really sorry to hear that the last few weeks have been rough for you. Sounds like a great start into 2024... Fingers crossed that it'll get better soon for you. And if you find time to read I hope it brings you some joy.
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